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soluble in water by *metalmistress:iconmetalmistress:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open




I’ve been drinking in my sleep again

and in the bathroom and kitchen and
under the stairs

where our eyes didn’t meet but warmed me
like diazepam and summer swimming
down stream; like a love –

a break in the mnemonic chain.


If I dared to ask, I know you’d hex
these tremors. You’d swear against
all intentions of hurt while stroking
that bent-twig in your pocket,

connected to strings, strings, cowardly
things –

the potency of my breath disgusts you.
©2008 *metalmistress
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Submitted: April 26
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April 25, 2008.

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~zerotonine:iconzerotonine: Apr 26, 2008, 3:08:57 PM
:omfg:
i.. just... LOVE this!!! everything about it. the tragedy that is presented like a lightweight song, from the first line to the last. it's incredibly good and so sweetly sad. if i wanted to pick my favorite line i couldn't, it's all great. let alone this little line:

"connected to strings, strings, cowardly
things –"

what an effect! it's so playfully fragile, like some child's rhyme, and yet so heavy with melancholy. i could go on like this for a while, but i think a :+fav: might shorten things.
thanks for writing this, i think i'm in love :love:
:cuddle:

--
the artist is the creator of beautiful things.
Oscar Wilde.
*metalmistress:iconmetalmistress: Apr 26, 2008, 4:17:09 PM
:shocked:!

Mmm hmmm....:cuddle:

Thanks so much for liking it. It's flattering! :blush: :blush: :blush:

What are your plans for the summer?
~zerotonine:iconzerotonine: Apr 26, 2008, 4:27:30 PM
it's great. i don't know... i just delighted in reading it. over and over and over and over and over and over again. ;)

--
the artist is the creator of beautiful things.
Oscar Wilde.
~zerotonine:iconzerotonine: Apr 26, 2008, 11:56:41 PM
wtf! i added it to favorites and it doesn't show in my favorites section! how come? :(

--
the artist is the creator of beautiful things.
Oscar Wilde.
*metalmistress:iconmetalmistress: Apr 27, 2008, 12:23:08 AM
Hmm...Really? I recieved the favorite notice on my page.
~zerotonine:iconzerotonine: Apr 27, 2008, 9:19:46 AM
i tried to re-fav it, but it's still not displayed. i don't get it. whatever :shrug:

--
the artist is the creator of beautiful things.
Oscar Wilde.
~zerotonine:iconzerotonine: Apr 27, 2008, 12:56:29 PM
okay, i took the strain to ask for help in some DA forum. now i've solved it :|

is it just my perception or do 80% of the people here suck? i mean, i just asked them :greetings:

--
the artist is the creator of beautiful things.
Oscar Wilde.
*metalmistress:iconmetalmistress: Apr 27, 2008, 5:32:09 PM
What was wrong with it anyway?

98% of the people here suck, dude!! haha I fucking hate them all. hahah
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